First Draft review with professional

I spent some time with the Managing Director, Tony Baxter from Voodoo Designs in Bristol. Their website can be found here (http://www.voodoodesign.com/). Tony has lots of experience in graphic design and so I was able to get professional advice on how to improve my own double page spread.
Below is my first draft of my double page spread:

I asked Tony what he thought on the positioning of the text and the colours used. Below are the things that he noticed and a few improvements that he suggested I could do to make my double page spread more effective.

1. Use a lighter shade of grey on the black wheels that hold the images at the bottom right. Also make the wheels a bit smaller but maintain the size of the tread in the wheel.

2. In the title change it to the "&" symbol and increase the size of the font.

3. Swap the logo and title round so that when in a magazine the title would appear first

4. Make sure that the text is aligned properly so will not fall into the middle of the page.

Some advice Tony also gave me was to think about the order that a viewer looks at the page. At the moment the pictures at the bottom right are the first thing your eyes are attracted to. I need to change it so that the order is title, logo, images, text.